Writing 101: Point of View
You may have read this report in the Daily Post. A man and a woman walk through the park together, holding hands. They pass a woman sitting on a bench. The woman is knitting a small, red sweater. The man begins to cry. I can verify the report as true. But it’s not the whole story.
June
August and I are in love. He says, the day he met me, he knew. My heart works a little slower. But soon my love grew and grew. We fit. Our hearts will always be together. Through triumph or adversity, our love is eternal and true.
We don’t let mis-communication distort our trust; to grow weeds that intrude on our love and insidiously disrupt. The words in your heart don’t always translate through your brain and tongue, to get your intended meaning across.
The listener isn’t in your head. They may have heard words differently to what you meant. We each have our own experiences and personal dictionary to filter through. But August and I know, neither would ever mean to hurt the other. So we unwrap the box of conversation to look inside the words, to see what the true message is.
We will do anything to be together. And forever is just the beginning of our future.
I love our walks. Though we’re focused on each other, the smiles we see, show our love is recognised, understood and well-received. So that day in the park when I saw tears in August’s eyes…
August
I will love her forever. We will stay together no matter what. She is my everything. My first thought through to my last. But when I saw that red sweater, the penny dropped, bounced and sunk. I knew it had begun. That he was here, to tear us apart. But they cannot separate us. We are meant to be, united forevermore.
I whispered to her, ‘do you see that woman knitting over there, looking around, enjoying her surrounds? She is not knitting, not looking, not a woman! It is Cal, Mr Endar spying. I won’t let this be the beginning of the end. We will find a new way of being.’
Cal
The people have spoken and it must begin today. They need a way to classify their lives further. They like to pigeonhole things into categories. It is a way for them to make sense of their world. We must knit time, in order for them to assimilate their moments into precious strands. But will they remember the months within the years?
June
When Cal-endar tore August and I apart, and put July in between. At first we were devastated, but never would we cede. This was not where we saw our lives heading, but adaptation was the path we chose. It may seem a long and winding road, but…
Let me tell you about ordinary magic. When faced with life’s stresses why do some survive, succeed? We decided to cultivate behaviours to enhance our well-being, cope with, and manage each scene. August and I had to be a little sneaky, and there were loopholes dangling everywhere. Cal-Endar is a loopy knitter!
Although people seem to be obsessed with time. Most minds are busy in the future or the past, caught up in worry or regret. And those who live in the present, are too busy enjoying life, to think about June and August…Plus we found a secret passage through the space-time continuum.
Those days when you wake up and you’re not sure what day, what month it is. August and I are together. When the weather seems more June than August or vice versa, we’re there. And the rest of the year, do you really care?
Hehe! 🙂
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Kudos!Awesome job!
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Thank you Cielo 🙂
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What an rare piece–I’m curious how you came up with all those intricacies. wonderful job..
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Thank you. Our minds work in mysterious ways 🙂
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What an original approach! Quite interesting.
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Thank you Joan 🙂
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Reblogged this on Live Laugh Love and commented:
I was so struck by this post I wanted to share it with all of you. The way the story was weaved is amazing and mind blowing. I found it unique and worth rereading. I hope you enjoy it as much as I did! 😀
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🙂 yippee! and thanks
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I was sleepy the first time, so I’m glad I came back to reread. Now I get it! A fun & clever story.
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Thanks so much!
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I do care.. 🙂
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Thank you for caring about June and August. Like many couples who get little time together they are doing their best to adapt, and see each moment together as precious. 😀
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lol.. you r righto
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May I suggest that June and August have a child called April and they all March together through the years. Wonderful post! 😄
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Thank you. Your so funny!
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Wonerful! Beautifully inspired by the original storyof the couple and the old woman. I believed when I read that it could develop into something more. Well done 🙂
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Thank you Robert 🙂
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It’s clever writing like this that makes reading such a pleasure.
Imaginative take , I thoroughly enjoyed it
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Thanks so much Wendy. Where you live sounds wonderful. 🙂
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Such a fun squiggly photo and wonderful story. Thanks.
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Thanks Cee.
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LOVED it! What a wonderful, touching and original story. There were some gems within the piece that particularly stood out for me. I really enjoyed the part about the script inside our head and the words we often use having no relation to it. The line ‘my heart works a little slower’ – great stuff. And lastly the references to knitting time (especially Cal being a loopy knitter!). A fitting addition to this week’s prompt. Thanks so much for contribution 🙂
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Thank you so much for your kind words.
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Reblogged this on Featured Fiction and commented:
A delightful, engaging and utterly romantic tale from ‘Love Happy Notes’. There’s a lot to unravel – check it out 🙂
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Thanks Melissa. 😀
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Hi
I just wanted to let you know that you’ll be the Featured writer this week on Featured Fiction. I’ll be posting your story in the featured section tomorrow when I put up the new round of prompts. Would you like to give me a sentence for this week’s theme, which will be Action and Adventure?
Thanks
Mel
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Thank you so much Mel. What an honour! I just made something up now. I hope it’s okay. I wasn’t sure when you needed it by.
‘We fed on blind adventure, devouring each course it laid.’
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Fantastic – what an exciting opening sentence 🙂 Thank you for setting the scene for this week. I can’t wait to get started on it now!
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Your so kind. I’m so glad you liked it.
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🙂 I love it!
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So creative! Love this line: “So we unwrap the box of conversation to look inside the words.”
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Thank you Jennifer. So many people misinterpret what the other person means and get hurt by misunderstood words. If we commmunicated by feelings…I wonder what that would be like.
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You always have a unexpected take on prompts. Love the feeling of folk tale this adopts at the end: explaining those times of the year when the weather and the time of the year don’t quite match up. (Like now, for instance, how can it be August when I’m wearing a jacket outside?) Good write, LHN!
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Thanks so much for your kind words. It’s winter here in August maybe the cool snuck over from here. 🙂
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What an ethereal story! It is probably the most creative piece I have ever read. Great job!!
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Wow, that’s so kind of you. Thank you.
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Some of my favorite things: abstract ideas, time travel, and knitting 😀
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Thank you Leanne! 🙂 Me too.
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That was quite a surprise and I enjoyed it!
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Thanks, that’s very kind of you. 🙂
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